Dialogue tags NOT to use
Writing advice on dialogue often tells us to use only the word 'said' as a dialogue tag. They seldom tell us what words not to use. Here are words NOT to use as dialogue tags:
Acknowledged
Added
Admitted
Advised
Agreed
Announced
Answered
Approved
Argued
Added
Admitted
Advised
Agreed
Announced
Answered
Approved
Argued
Asserted
Assumed
Assured
Asked
Babbled
Bargained
Began
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Assured
Asked
Babbled
Bargained
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Bellowed
Boasted
Bragged
Called
Claimed
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Commented
Complained
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Bragged
Called
Claimed
Commanded
Commented
Complained
Cried
Decided
Declared
Demanded
Denied
Described
Dictated
Emphasized
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Exclaimed
Explained
Expressed
Feared
Giggled
Grinned
Grunted
Demanded
Denied
Described
Dictated
Emphasized
Estimated
Exclaimed
Explained
Expressed
Feared
Giggled
Grinned
Grunted
Howled
Indicated
Insisted
Instructed
Laughed
Lectured
Lied
Mentioned
Moaned
Mumbled
Murmured
Nagged
Noted
Notified
Objected
Observed
Ordered
Pleaded
Pointed out
Prayed
Predicted
Questioned
Reassured
Related
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Scolded
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Stormed
Suggested
Taunted
Thought
Told
Urged
Uttered
Vented
Vocalized
Voiced
Vowed
Wailed
Warned
Whispered
Indicated
Insisted
Instructed
Laughed
Lectured
Lied
Mentioned
Moaned
Mumbled
Murmured
Nagged
Noted
Notified
Objected
Observed
Ordered
Pleaded
Pointed out
Prayed
Predicted
Questioned
Reassured
Related
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Replied
Responded
Requested
Restated
Revealed
Roared
Ruled
Scolded
Screamed
Shouted
Shrieked
Snapped
Sneered
Sobbed
Spoke
Sputtered
Stammered
Stated
Stormed
Suggested
Taunted
Thought
Told
Urged
Uttered
Vented
Vocalized
Voiced
Vowed
Wailed
Warned
Whispered
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27 comments:
"Sometimes I get sick of all the rules," he whispered.
"But, everybody needs rules," they replied.
"To hell with it," he screamed.
"Calm dawn," they began.
"Let's just write something fun and not worry about any of the rules," he howled.
"That's just crazy talk," they claimed. "You'll never get published that way."
"Well, isn't that why we have day jobs," he pointed out.
"Oh. So you are just an amateur," they observed.
"Yeah. I guess that's right," he answered.
Too funny, Mike! she thought quietly.
Novice question: How come all you can you use is said? I've heard that before, and would that make for drab and boring writing: He said, she said, they said, etc. I can understand phrases like ejaculated, but why not whisper?
And my bet is that whoever said that only watches black and white movies.
"Jeez," I would implore to him or her, "ever hear of Technicolor?!
Bill
"Said" is invisible. The reader's eye skips right over it. And it's not like every line is "he said, she said." Some lines don't need any tags, some get action beats. It all evens out.
But sometimes, it's fun to mix it up a little. Personally, I liked "hissed."
This is a great post, and a lot of beginning writers waste so much time racking their brains to come up with anything other than "said." Little do they know ...
Ken
Those are good. :) I would think of something witty to write here, but my head is full of snot.... (wait for it...) She typed snottily.
...and some don't even like said...
This is a great reminder! 'Said' pretty much says all that is necessary.
And to add onto Sela's reasoning, when you use anything other than said too often, the reader becomes aware of the author or that they're reading. Like anything else, once you know the rules, you can break them occasionally, but only with good reason!
Oh, I see. Thanks! I've been curious about that for a while.
great list, would definately like to see more of these as I often try to use something other than said but usually end up with either "said." "told him/her" "called" etc...
It especially drives me crazy when newspapers, especially cutesy community ones with 'reporters' made up of relatives of the publisher or wannabe novelists (the kind that talk about, talk about, but never do) write the articles. The word that drives me most postal? "Noted". ' "The bicyclist was driving over snow-covered sidewalks and just asking for problems," noted Constable Gendarme when asked about the cause of the crash.' Arghhhhh! For some inscrutable reason, this is gasoline on the flames of irritation over shoddy writing. Or maybe I just don't have enough to worry about?
Keep it clean, keep it simple, I guess, when it comes to dialogue verbs. Says and said work for me. Whether it's fiction or nonfiction.
Wonderful post!
When I learned the rules, I had to remove some instances of "he offered"
"she croaked," and "he barked." And yes, these were people speaking, not frogs or dogs. LOL.
Just discovered you and am going to read through your pieces. Looks great!
I don't agree with this rule. Said as your only dialogue tag DOES NOT become invisible. I don't care what you say. I've read books following this rule and in my opinion they don't work 90% of the time.
You have to rely on so many MORE words to simple get the point across that 'he shouted' that many times authors can't do it successfully.
My rule is 75% said - 25% other
However, that said, there aren't A LOT in the other category I approve a using. Whisper, Shout, Scream and Agree are dialogue tags I think have their place in writing and can be used effectively. On occasion I don't have a problem with some of the others like demand, deny, mumble, and order.
Dialogue tags are more complicated than saying use this one and don't use these those. Dialogue is my strongest point in writing--and I don't use just 'said'. But like I said there's so much more to dialogue than tags and whether you use them or not.
(ok rant over :))
hey Jennifer - I was being a bit fecitious - however, I think newbie writers are better off using the rule until they know how to break it.
Hi :) Sorry the 'you' wasn't implying you--it was really more to the rule books (the writers of them...) that write these rules. And of course this is a topic that's always been one I have lots to say on.
Sorry, hope I didn't come off sounding mean!
I think 'whispered' is ok in some circumstances...
"Look out!" she cried, zestfully!
"A pigeon!" he exclaimed excitedly.
:-)
I must say, I'm absolutely confused by this rule. I think stories would be rather stilted if the only accepted dialogue tag was "said." (Of course, maybe this is more true for erotic fiction than mainstream. "Oh, god! I'm going to come," he said, is somewhat flat to me. And I'm all for my characters whispering, murmuring, purring, cooing and the like.)
That "said," one of my favorite writers is Roddy Doyle, and if I remember correctly, he doesn't use any dialogue tags at all. Just dashes.
Very interesting post...
Best,
Alison
I think the reason this became one of the infamous "rules" is because editors were going bananas over all the newbie writers "shouting" "hissing" "declaiming" all over the place when, really, a simple "said" would have covered it.
As previously noted, if every line of dialogue is "he said, she said" then yes, it becomes obvious and stilted. But not all dialogue needs attribution. I use action tags to set a mood rather than relying on "said" or "postulated" or "noted."
In any case, this rule is a good one to break once you know how to do it well. It's all part of the growing process as a writer.
I try to avoid dialog tags and use action tags instead. For some reason, "John said," tends to pull me out of the action in a story and remind me that I'm reading. I'd rather see...
John pulled the knife out of Mark's thigh. "We'll kill them for this. I swear it."
Or something like that. Could just be me. I've been told that dialog tags aren't the evil things I think they are.
This is the most idiotic thing I have ever heard. . . Every book i've ever read uses those words in you pointless little list. I myself write stories and all my freinds love them. Even people I don't know like them. And wanna know something else I use the words in your list. In fact the reason I stiumbled upon your little list is becasue I was looked for words to use in my dialogue. In fact I'm going to copy and past the list as a refrence when I can't think of what words to use. And just so you know in school I was once given a list of words just like your and we were told to use them in our narritives so I don't know where you learned this. Also I'm sorry I sound so rude, I'm PMSing. . .
Instead of using words like whisper, grunted, screamed as a dialogue tag, just use them as an action tag.
Using someone's previous example:
A pigeon!" he exclaimed excitedly.
could be this instead:
"A pigeon!" Timmy pointed and jumped up and down. "Look, Mommy! It's flying away!"
You don't need the word 'exclaimed' because the exclamation point already tells us how it's being said. The action tags should show the reader that the little boy is excited.
i see why this is argued so much, too much of any good thing can be vexing, but its really an opinionated thing that can be handled in many ways. as i said too much of anyting is redundant, but if you use a variety of things that work together there shouldnt be a problem.
Yelled
Hollered
Groaned
Mused
Grumbled
How do you feel about the occasional "said he"?
Facetious or not, this is pretty crummy advice, if I do say so myself. I've been told for years that I shouldn't use ONLY the word 'said'. So I don't know where you get your writing advice from, but I advise that you don't pass it on.
The words that you listed CAN be good to use, but sometimes said IS the better word. But saying it's the only word to use in dialogues is possibly the worst piece of writing advice I've ever heard.
I really do hope that you're completely joking with this because, if not, I'd really hate to read anything you've written because it must be rather flat and the characters must have no emotion.
Example of good use:
"Mommy!" Ella cried, reaching for the lolly. "Please, Mommy?"
"No, sweetheart. You'll ruin your appetite," Karen said, grasping her daughter's wrist.
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